Good job acting cameron!
The message isn't super clear because you don't do a good job in establishing that that girl is homeless. I know that was part of the plan but we see nothing in your shots that tells us that she is without a home. The sequencing is good, your shots are pretty solid, but it just doesn't make the connection at the end with the homeless family. It's really hard to tell from that wide shot at the end that this family is homeless. Maybe seeing a tent in a closer shot would have been better instead of that really wide shot at the end. 3.4 points
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.