Ok so first off we're missing the second half of your script. If you look at what's posted, for some reason it stops at point 4. Go back and assign each point a color and then in your script, color the sound bites that support that particular point. You'll see really easily where you have lots of evidence and where you don't for each of your points. As we discussed in class today, your points also need some adjustments: Point 1 should be about what the program is, point 2 is about how it works, point 3 is about when it began (history), and I'm thinking point 4 could be about who the musicians are, how they came together, and how they practice. Then point 5 could be about how to sign up if you'd like to help. Let's work on these things for the next revision. 2 points
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.