QTR 2 Project- 1st Draft

12/19/2016

Mr. M

1/15/2017 01:28:43 am

What a great story about a wonderful program. This is certainly a wonderful thing that these musicians are doing for these people in need of some love and care.

Is there any reason why your b-roll moves so much? Did you guys not bring a tripod with you? If you were pressed for space in the rooms you went to, you could have kept the legs closed and used it more like a monopod. I really wish your b-roll shots were more steady.

The interviews were done very well. All had good audio and were framed well. Nice job.

Opening was good but I don't like how you switched to a different shot of the musicians. You could totally tell this wasn't the same group. I think keeping it on that one group in that room would be a better choice.

Some of your b-roll has no audio and that's hard to watch. You know they are playing instruments or singing and we hear nothing. If you have one long clip of them singing, you could use that and keep the music going on in the back for an extended time to fix this. It's just a little weird to see strumming of the ukulele that doesn't match the music you hear or not hearing it at all.

In the section about aloha and love, better b-roll needs to be chosen. I'd love to see clips where you can see people laughing or really showing that aloha spirit in their music and song.

Be careful when you say the program loves what they are doing. Can a program do that? It's the group that loves what they are doing, not the program. 3.3 points

QTR 2 Project- 1st Draft

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