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9/15/2016

Mr. M

10/19/2016 10:40:43 pm

The interviews have good audio. The dad's interview was shot the best but the others were shot against a wall. We really need to stay away from walls so that we can have some depth there. The story is ok but I feel like there are parts left out that I want to know more about. You make it seem like he's all fine and dandy after the surgery but you can hear his voice being raspy. Is that from the surgery? Will it get better? Does he have to return for any treatment or tests? Is he 100% free from cancer? The problem with cancer is that while it can go into remission and not be there for a while, it can come back and so I think he's forever going to have to keep getting tests done and checkups to make sure. I want to also know more about Rocket. It's mentioned that he's good with his hands and we see pictures of leis, playing volleyball, and hula. What was he like before the incident? How did they find out that he had cancer? I like the part about how his parents talk about how he has this glowing light within him. I think that's great. The part about being turned down from the insurance carriers is also something I want to know more about. Why were they turned down? How did the family overcome this and did the insurance eventually kick in? Your b-roll is pretty good but you need to include more sequences. They also experienced a break-in to their vehicle when they went up for their surgery. Maybe that wasn't important to the family but the news report I saw about it done by a mainland tv station explained how the family didn't care about the material possessions but cared more about the get well cards for Rocket that were also taken. It's tough because this is a great story but I can't ask you to go back again to refilm the interviews. We've already visited them several times and I think we have to move on and learn from this experience. 2.65 points

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